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Old 12-18-2016, 12:41 PM   #1
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Fire of Darkness movie is coming out

Hi everybody,

I created this post because at the moment we are still working on Fire of Darkness but the entire project is at the end. This is the old demo trailer, we would like to have a lot of comments, also on our YouTube channel, because we need all your support.

Thank you very much , you are the best
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Old 12-18-2016, 09:25 PM   #2
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Is there a reason there's no dialogue?
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Old 12-19-2016, 08:11 AM   #3
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Yes absolutely... its because we have to dub the entire movie yet.
At the moment our attention is focused on the entire editing e post production that have to follow the story.
Hope it can be interesting for you even without voices, please let us know that
... also on YouTube !
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Old 12-20-2016, 08:39 AM   #4
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Others?
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Old 12-20-2016, 09:46 PM   #5
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I'm unsure why you'd market an unfinished trailer. But for feedback, I made it maybe 60 seconds in before I switched it off.

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Hope it can be interesting for you even without voices
While I guess, you know what's going on, I didn't. To me, it was just a mumbo jumbo of (what appeared to me) mistimed shots, with no understandable story. I'd suggest at least putting in sub-titles. Then I'd have a chance to figure out what you're intending to show.

I wish you luck in your film.
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Old 12-20-2016, 11:06 PM   #6
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Hope it can be interesting for you even without voices, please let us know that
... also on YouTube !
It looked to me like you made a mistake in the mix. I thought
the dialogue track was missing. So it wasn't interesting to me.
I didn't get a sense of the story - it was just random shots with
no context.

Your opening titles: "dark Evil is raising"; raising is incorrect.
While raise and rise both mean "up", to raise needs an object.
Evil is not an object. What you mean is evil is rising. And even
then there are better words to convey that message.

The animation is terrific. You should showcase a much better
demo trailer. There is a reason that producers (and directors)
do not make their own trailers; we get too close to the hard work
we did and want to show it. You need to take a step back and show
us what your movie is about, what will make us want to watch it
rather than showing all you hard work in an unfinished stage.

Put together 90 seconds and don't show talking without the dialogue
tracks. Three minutes is way too much. I was bored after 60 seconds.
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Old 12-22-2016, 03:13 PM   #7
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I'm unsure why you'd market an unfinished trailer. But for feedback, I made it maybe 60 seconds in before I switched it off.



While I guess, you know what's going on, I didn't. To me, it was just a mumbo jumbo of (what appeared to me) mistimed shots, with no understandable story. I'd suggest at least putting in sub-titles. Then I'd have a chance to figure out what you're intending to show.

I wish you luck in your film.

I understand what you mean... this trailer is old and we had created it simply using some portions of the movie still under development.
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Old 12-22-2016, 03:21 PM   #8
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It looked to me like you made a mistake in the mix. I thought
the dialogue track was missing. So it wasn't interesting to me.
I didn't get a sense of the story - it was just random shots with
no context.

Your opening titles: "dark Evil is raising"; raising is incorrect.
While raise and rise both mean "up", to raise needs an object.
Evil is not an object. What you mean is evil is rising. And even
then there are better words to convey that message.

The animation is terrific. You should showcase a much better
demo trailer. There is a reason that producers (and directors)
do not make their own trailers; we get too close to the hard work
we did and want to show it. You need to take a step back and show
us what your movie is about, what will make us want to watch it
rather than showing all you hard work in an unfinished stage.

Put together 90 seconds and don't show talking without the dialogue
tracks. Three minutes is way too much. I was bored after 60 seconds.

You are right man, I agree in this trailer we just wanted to show "too much" instead that a shorter trailer with 7/8 clips. The entire movie needs dubbing, that's why you cant hear the voices and yes this is a bad aspect of this trailer.
Nice to know that you like the animations and the feeling you have is positive while you watching the images.
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Old 12-27-2016, 03:42 PM   #9
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Please let us know what is your mood guys, it is very important for us,
thank you.
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Old 12-27-2016, 11:33 PM   #10
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Check your file, the dialog is missing.
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Old 01-03-2017, 02:34 PM   #11
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Check your file, the dialog is missing.
If you read the post above, this is not a file error but the reason is that we have to dubbing. We will dub the film once the post-production will be finished
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Old 01-03-2017, 03:13 PM   #12
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I see. I try to watch trailers before reading so I have a fresh perspective. It looks like an error and you may want to wait for the dubbing or recut a teaser with no missing lines.
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I see. I try to watch trailers before reading so I have a fresh perspective. It looks like an error and you may want to wait for the dubbing or recut a teaser with no missing lines.
Error? Do you mean the entire film seems to be an error? Why?
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