Home

Go Back   IndieTalk - Indie Film Forum > Making The Film > Screenwriting

Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 06-09-2018, 02:27 AM   #1
Future_Screen
Basic Member
 
Join Date: Mar 2018
Location: Germany
Posts: 208
What is really important for a description of a scene?

Description. I believe that is the most important stuff of a screenplay! I mean, how shall you implement the movie if you don’t know what’s happening. And there’s description’s role. But how do you write it without overusing? Let’s discuss, which details are important. I wrote an example for it:

Ext./Int. – House – Day

HELENA (27), a blonde woman with amber-brown eyes and white-skinned, walks a path along in the garden.

She grabs one of the moving boxes, which stands by the truck of the moving company.

Helena goes into the house.

Int. House, living room – Continous

Helena stands in the middle of the living room now. She put the moving box on another box.

MALE VOICE (O.S.)
And there she is!

Int. – House, living room – same (shot by the cam)

Helena rolls her eyes.

Helena
Oh! C’mon, Jerry. You know, I hate it to be shot.

Int. House, living room – same

JERRY (Man) stands towards Helena. He makes a disappointed face. His cam is on his shoulder.

JERRY
(disappointed)
fun killer!

Jerry is looking for something else, which he can shot.

He goes outta the living room.


Maybe you can make it better if you don’t like it.
Future_Screen is offline   Reply With Quote
Old Today   #1A
film guy
Basic Member
 
Posts: 17

 
Old 06-09-2018, 04:56 AM   #2
Quality
Basic Member
 
Quality's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2016
Location: Boston, Ma
Posts: 998
Future, I can't believe I'm calling you Future haha. I realise that you stopped private messagng me. I don't know if it's because your inbox is full or you got tired of me spamming, just write the first draft and we'll guild you from there!
Quality is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-09-2018, 05:37 AM   #3
Future_Screen
Basic Member
 
Join Date: Mar 2018
Location: Germany
Posts: 208
@Quality Even if the first draft is garbage, it has to be good by the description. And that was just an example to critique my description style. As a screenwriter, you never stop learning or can say "Yah! I’m perfect!". That’s why!
Future_Screen is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-09-2018, 06:56 AM   #4
Panos
Basic Member
 
Panos's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2015
Location: Greece
Posts: 203
Something that I learned through writing, which also happens in any situation, like creating music, is that you can learn such things, like how to describe a scene, through writing. I think that happens because when you start writing that means you have a passion about the story you want to write and therefore you know how you want to describe the scene. You have a passion about describing it. Trying to learn such things outside the action of writing is a bit nonsensical. Instead, ask and do research about these things when you need it for the story you are writing. You will learn deeply.
Panos is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-14-2018, 06:03 AM   #5
WalterB
Basic Member
 
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: Rotterdam Area, The Netherlands
Posts: 3,610
Quote:
Originally Posted by Panos View Post
Something that I learned through writing, which also happens in any situation, like creating music, is that you can learn such things, like how to describe a scene, through writing. I think that happens because when you start writing that means you have a passion about the story you want to write and therefore you know how you want to describe the scene. You have a passion about describing it. Trying to learn such things outside the action of writing is a bit nonsensical. Instead, ask and do research about these things when you need it for the story you are writing. You will learn deeply.
This +1

It is like karate. You can't just read karate books and expect to be able to do it right the first time.
WalterB is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-14-2018, 08:20 AM   #6
indietalk
IndieTalk Founder
 
indietalk's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2003
Location: NYC
Posts: 10,746
I know karate



and seven other Chinese words
indietalk is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-14-2018, 09:50 AM   #7
Panos
Basic Member
 
Panos's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2015
Location: Greece
Posts: 203
Quote:
Originally Posted by indietalk View Post
I know karate



and seven other Chinese words


WalterB that's true
Panos is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-14-2018, 10:02 AM   #8
sfoster
IndieTalk Moderator
 
sfoster's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Maryland
Posts: 5,316
What is important description? Two words.


Orange Juice
sfoster is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 06-14-2018, 10:05 AM   #9
sfoster
IndieTalk Moderator
 
sfoster's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Maryland
Posts: 5,316
My advice to you is to use as little direction as possible in the script.
Don't micromanage your actors and let them focus on the acting instead of exactly what to do with a prop in a play by play.
sfoster is online now   Reply With Quote
Reply

Bookmarks


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump


All times are GMT -5. The time now is 10:04 PM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.9
Copyright ©2000 - 2018, vBulletin Solutions, Inc.


©IndieTalk