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My first and only short film

I think that the worsening of his "medical condition" could have been shown in a more original way, like establishing an activity that he likes (motorcycle, car, model railroad, etc.) and have him doing that activity with some skill at the beginning then show, as his appearance worsens, he loses skill at that activity until he finally abandons it altogether. The conversation with the doctor could have just been "I'm taking you off of the medication because it is accelerating your demise". You could cover the hallucinations by showing a warning label on the pill bottle. Then show him improve in appearance somewhat and go the day without seeing her. The next day he doubles up on the dosage. I could also do without all of the internal dialog.

That said, congrats on finishing the project!
 
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