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short story :mandreke

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mandrake got Clark Kent on chair seated ,
mandrake
'just close your eyes,
just feel the realm of mine'

clark follows.

man'you into deep transe'

clark follows


man ' you are in a pirates ship along with many people .
night , only full moon to be your tourch.
big waves surrounding and irritating the of both people and pirates clamness.

suddenly people see a guy standing on tall and straight as hope to save both pirates and people.

do you see him too.'

clark 'yes, i do'

man ' what do you feel when you look at him?'

clark 'hope'
man 'but, why?'

clark,' he is ......?????'

man' go on '
clark,' he is .....????'


man' he is your alter ego , he is power ful . nobody can stop him. he is massiah for people '


clark,' yes, he is'

man.' take that personlaity name and say you believe in his power and achievement'


clark,' MANDREK ! i BELIEVE IN YOU '

MAN , silent for minute.


man,'slowly the picture fades in front of you fades away'

clark follows

man, ' just open your eyes and return to normal life'

clark follows.

man frustrated 'you have to leave , mister clark .'
clark,'is something wrong?'
man,'nope, just leave . i got someone to meet now'
clark confused, ' ok, but want to meet you again next time'

man,'may be, noe just please...'

clark leaves unwantingly.


man enters the room, sits on bed in front is a mirror.
takes a look at it.
man .v.o
'belief is necessary , to one to enter a dream.
trust is neccesity to feel the dream.
ladies and gentle man , just trust me !

let me to give you people a chance to witness the unbelievable joy of your life time !!!!'

man closes his eye, palm face for minute.
prepared , staires at mirror again.

man v.o
' i am looking at mandrak.
mandrek the belief of whole mankind.
mandrake, the trust of super hero.
mandrake who make who mankind believe him.
yes he do
and yes
he did.

he can make me belive in myself too

yes i can forget the bad dream and past of mine.'

man closes eyes,
man,'come on....
come on.......'

door knock.

man opens eyes

p.a ,' ready for the next show sir?'


man ,' ya , i m coming'

looking at himself mirror, sitting pathetically .
 
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I have 3 options for you:

- learn to write proper stories in proper English (instead of badly punctiated staccato)
- learn to write proper script format in proper English
- write in your native language if that's not English and you are able to write properly

Either of these will help you to get the proper response you are looking for.

Or just keep screaming: "just fuck off!"
and that's what people will do: them will move away from you and your ideas and they will stay away. Leaving you helplessly frustrated pondering why nobody sees your great talent.

Nobody sees it, because it is obscured by bad communication skills.
It's like saying: "Hey, f#cker! There is a clean floor below that layer of dirt and shit! Why don't you hire me to clean your floors!!!"

That does not work...
 
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this was a challenge to directorik,
not for newbies.

Now he got , idea about scene and movie.
it's really easy to turn this story line in to script.
but the story line is so strong , it will turn into good script.
(I don't want mandreke wearing that awkward suite.but, he be wearing any normal suite of modern day)
(GEORGE CLOONEY WAS WORST TO BE BAT MAN, HIS FACE SUITED MANDRAKE, ONLY IF HE AVOIDE SHAKING HIS HEAD AND UNCOMFORTABLE VOICE)
I f good director(WANTO TO BE),
and good actor(WANT TO BE),
SCRIPT WRITER(WANT OT BE)
DAIOGUE WRITER(WANNA BE)
BACK GROUND MUSIC (WANNA BE)
CAMERAMAN (WANNA BE)

then it is surely challenge to them !!!
you come and bet
and say 'NO'

i CHALLENGE !!
 
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well, you failed the challenge.
Direktorik asked for a great script.

He didn't asked to be challenged to understand what you have written.
In fact he challenged you.

I don't bet.
I don't say no.
Actually I am helping you in your quest.
But it seems your poor mastering of English inhibits you from understanding what I wrote. Let alone you will ever find the good advice that is in there.

I bet (oops you made me bet anyway :P ) you haven't even discovered you can read people's profiles.
But I don't care if you call me a newbie.

However, I do know that if I would present an idea or a script the way you do, I'd lose my clients. All of them.
 
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" i am looking at mandrak.
mandrek the belief of whole mankind.
mandrake, the trust of super hero."

Obviously you can't even be bothered to proofread your own work.
Yet you expect other people to read when you yourself have obviously not read it.

Also

clark,' MANDREK ! i BELIEVE IN YOU

Will have people either rolling their eyes or laughing out loud. :lol:
 
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