So, you would have the coffin opening before the running up the castle stairs? Doable for the second version. Reduce the narration to eliminate repetition? Okay.
I have more than one cut of running up the castle stairs. I will try another cut for the next version. However, that was a difficult shoot literally dodging tourists who were coming down the stairs as I was trying to shoot. Should I add camera shake to the staircase footage?
Change the transition at 45 seconds may be the best solution.
What's coming out of the coffin is vampire smoke showing the vampires are coming. And, the final graveyard scene are a hoard of vampires in their bat forms. My books have the old school vampires who are big on shape shifting, unlike modern vampires.
I wanted the trailer to have a taste of the shape shifting vampires.