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Critique my screenplay try

I rather like it - it's just a beginning, but you interested me.

There certainly are English issues, and some screenplay format issues. But I definitely like the eye color change at the end, which is what would keep me reading.
 
I'm glad you can visualize that. Football is soccer in Europe, and the "stadium" includes the field AND seats, and two of them, well, if a room is that big.................................................. i quit lol!
 
I'm glad you can visualize that. Football is soccer in Europe, and the "stadium" includes the field AND seats, and two of them, well, if a room is that big.................................................. i quit lol!

I see the location description as under the purview of the
writer. If she sees the location as as big as two football
stadiums and qualifies that as being like a James Bond
movie I can picture that.

Going for the outlandish is the writers choice.
 
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