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Story & twist/reveal was fairly typical of student filmmaker projects. Not sayin' it's necessarily bad; just that I've seen more variations on this than you could count. 
The motion shots with the camera could have used some help; even some cheap DIY gear.
But yeah - keep makin' them. Every single project will be a learning experience, and lessons learned can be applied in later films.
The motion shots with the camera could have used some help; even some cheap DIY gear.
But yeah - keep makin' them. Every single project will be a learning experience, and lessons learned can be applied in later films.
Why would you be pushing someone else's film?
I liked it! Enjoyed the plot twist and thought it was well edited.
Check out my film "A Cancerous Greed" also on YouTube. It is longer but I would love to know what you think
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mDInzEQUc4w
Check out my film "A Cancerous Greed" also on YouTube. It is longer but I would love to know what you think
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mDInzEQUc4w
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I thought it was well done, although I agree with Zensteve that the camera motion could use better stabilization at points. The editing could be tighter as well - there are several cuts where you could pull a second or two from the next shot and maintain a better flow of the action. For example, he walks towards the camera, you cut to a reverse shot of him walking down the trail, but he's still visibly picking up speed from a still position - so it doesn't look like a continuous motion from the previous shot.
I also think the ending should be cut much shorter. You need to trust the audience to get it - there's no need for the additional close up shots of the wheels, etc. He opens his eyes, we see the handle behind him, his friend says 'we need to go now', and you cut to them turning and heading off down the trail. As it stands now it feels like you're beating the audience over the head with the twist a bit.
I also think the ending should be cut much shorter. You need to trust the audience to get it - there's no need for the additional close up shots of the wheels, etc. He opens his eyes, we see the handle behind him, his friend says 'we need to go now', and you cut to them turning and heading off down the trail. As it stands now it feels like you're beating the audience over the head with the twist a bit.