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Feedback/Advice on my short script?

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Hey everyone. I recently wrote a short, 20 page script that I would very much appreciate if anyone read (parts) of it and gave me any pieces of advice or plain feedback about any aspect of it.

The story follows a paper boy who comes into big money and must deal with the dramatic implications that follow, including family and friends' greedy pursuits for the wealth.

Thank you for any help.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/9eyavg0fzhjnb0v/THEPAPERBOY.pdf?dl=0
 
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I read it all. I think it's an interesting starting point for a story, but not really a story in itself. Part of the problem is that everything moves too fast. The whole thing seems rushed and (perhaps because of that) the interactions seem forced and unrealistic. Also, is $85k considered "big money"?
 
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