Hello, Everyone,
I'm in the works of developing a new dystopian sci fi screenplay and am about 51 pages through with the story, and I would say in the beginning of my second act. The script is titled Souls of the Lost, and the following is the logline:
The story of three individuals living their lives out in a future Chicago that is plagued with food shortages, civil unrest, and a corrupt government.
I feel the logline may be a little vague in terms of what exactly happens to each of these characters, and I still find it difficult to summarize each of their lives into a one sentence logline, but to elaborate a little more, the three MCs consist of a father and son, who both have trouble relating to one another after the death of the wife/mother, and a police officer who joins the forces to fight guerillas, only to find his superiors may be committing violent offences against innocent civilians.
Google Drive link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B9tmVlRjfCgBNUNKemM4ZVVCTEk/view?usp=sharing
Any feedback on story elements, pacing, characters, dialogue, as well as technical aspects like formatting, grammar, sentence structure, length of action, sluglines, etc are appreciated.
Thank you for taking the time to read and I hope you all enjoy.
I'm in the works of developing a new dystopian sci fi screenplay and am about 51 pages through with the story, and I would say in the beginning of my second act. The script is titled Souls of the Lost, and the following is the logline:
The story of three individuals living their lives out in a future Chicago that is plagued with food shortages, civil unrest, and a corrupt government.
I feel the logline may be a little vague in terms of what exactly happens to each of these characters, and I still find it difficult to summarize each of their lives into a one sentence logline, but to elaborate a little more, the three MCs consist of a father and son, who both have trouble relating to one another after the death of the wife/mother, and a police officer who joins the forces to fight guerillas, only to find his superiors may be committing violent offences against innocent civilians.
Google Drive link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B9tmVlRjfCgBNUNKemM4ZVVCTEk/view?usp=sharing
Any feedback on story elements, pacing, characters, dialogue, as well as technical aspects like formatting, grammar, sentence structure, length of action, sluglines, etc are appreciated.
Thank you for taking the time to read and I hope you all enjoy.