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Old 09-11-2017, 09:48 PM   #1
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Feedback Request - Joe Fo Sho - sitcom pilot

https://www.dropbox.com/s/ll7l1htycgozl84/What%20It%20Do-%20%28Joe%20Fo%20Sho%29.pdf?dl=0


Episode logline: "After breaking up with his girlfriend and moving out of her apartment, Joe looks for a new place to live, and he somehow ends up getting involved with a wanted terrorist."

This show’s main character is based loosely on this guy:
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Old 09-12-2017, 11:37 AM   #2
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The conversation Joe has with his grandma in the opening scene got me hooked to read through the script. Real funny stuff. It reminded me of a friend from the ghetto who would choke up on complicated words: predictement.

The script reads real good. Interesting choice of short scenes and gags, with a nice punchline at the end. Two thumbs up!
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Thanks, Krios. I'm glad to hear you enjoyed the script.
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My pleasure Rodney.
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