Way too much of the 30 second clip is text with nothing going on in the background. Over half the video just showed text. Just saying I think that is a big issue. I made a short trailer for batman/chrysler contest that was near 30 seconds that had a ton going on. Just saying I think you could shorten your video a lot or put a lot more in your video. One of the two. Remember the trailer should hold the audience attention and keep them entertained if possible. Remember people have such a sort attention span now days.
On the positive side I did like the footage at the end and the title Ride looked good on there. Although the footage only showed a truck driving I get why you showed it.