Hi all
I was wondering if I could get some feedback on a pilot for a short web series I'm writing. It's a comedy about a group of software developers who have a week to build and sell a video game in order for them to pay the rent to their psychotic landlord.
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Note this is the first screenplay I've ever attempted to write, so it might be riddled with classic, textbook, non-more-noobish mistakes. But it's only 7 pages and I think it's slightly funny anyway
Please let me know what you think and how I can improve.
Cheers
EDIT: Contains some strong language, hopefully not gratuitous
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I was wondering if I could get some feedback on a pilot for a short web series I'm writing. It's a comedy about a group of software developers who have a week to build and sell a video game in order for them to pay the rent to their psychotic landlord.
**Removed - PM me**
Note this is the first screenplay I've ever attempted to write, so it might be riddled with classic, textbook, non-more-noobish mistakes. But it's only 7 pages and I think it's slightly funny anyway
Please let me know what you think and how I can improve.
Cheers
EDIT: Contains some strong language, hopefully not gratuitous
EDIT2: Link removed
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