Hi! I wrote this short film after throwing around some crazy ideas with my husband one day and I really like it. In fact, months or even a year after writing it I still laugh every time I read it because I can see it so well in my head. The question is, can you? I'm looking for feedback on
a) is it funny to other people?
b) does any part need to be re-written?
and c) to settle an argument with my husband (also a screenwriter) - do you think it ought to be filmed or animated?
Questions welcome!
Here's the script: http://bit.ly/ry7XGp (it's a quick read, less than 3 pages)
Thank you so much for reading it and any feedback you want to give - even a one-liner would be appreciated.
a) is it funny to other people?
b) does any part need to be re-written?
and c) to settle an argument with my husband (also a screenwriter) - do you think it ought to be filmed or animated?
Questions welcome!
Here's the script: http://bit.ly/ry7XGp (it's a quick read, less than 3 pages)
Thank you so much for reading it and any feedback you want to give - even a one-liner would be appreciated.