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Can one edit and make/direct my very short film?

It is a criminal, and I tried to write it to be short and easy to make.. It is not still in script format and also it is not in proper English. Can anyone help?



Thanks!
 
It's both possible and a very good idea. It'll teach you a lot.



I'm sure if you offer enough money as an incentive, I'm sure you'll get all the help you need.


You mean you get money for it? It is just a bit more than two pages docx.


No one free? It is a little project..


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You mean you get money for it?

Yep. That's what I mean. Not for me specifically. I don't do the kind of scut work you're asking.

No one free? It is a little project..

There's free and there's free. One means available. I'm sure many are available. It's just a matter of you providing an incentive for them to drop their own projects, putting aside work, time with their family/friends to spend time on your project.. Money is a good incentive to get the scut work done that you're either incapable or unwilling to do. If you cannot offer money, what else is their incentive?
 
It is a criminal, and I tried to write it to be short and easy to make.. It is not still in script format and also it is not in proper English. Can anyone help?
I'll look at the script.

Making a short film (even two pages) costs money. Even if it's
one day of shooting the actors and crew need something for
their time - even it's just a couple of meals.
 
Are you offering the story for free to filmmakers for the writing credit?

That's the gist I get from the first post. And probably the best way to see it made, since you aren't interested in directing or editing it.
 
I know you know it, but that is a mess. and it's not because of your
lack of English proficiency. I was thinking I could format it and clean
up any language issues, but I don't even understand the first few
paragraphs.

How about this:

Look at THIS LINK and try your script again. Take your
first 15 sentences and:

Write down the location as in that example.
Write down what we will see on the screen.
When the location changes, write that change just like in the example.

Don't worry about proper English, just put it in proper format.
don't do the dialogue, just the action.

Okay?
 
Locations:

Airport with payphone ( ??? do pay phones even exist still ???)
Two Busy Public Streets
Driving a Car
Interrogation Room
Bedroom
Jail
Big River with Adjacent Parking
Train

This is extremely complicated for a short film. Way way way too complicated for something you don't want to pay money for.
This will be expensive and very time consuming for such a short script.

You also have a large cast... man. man1. man2. woman. woman. boy. one of men. one of men.
Plus all the background extras...

No one is going to make this for free. It costs too much money.
Worst of all I don't understand the story.

I read it and I don't know what the point is and don't connect with any of the characters.
What does this story mean to you? What are you trying to communicate to the audience
 
I could not put a long story in it. That's about some little robbers who will rob some big transgressors bag (like smugglers bag) and will cause one killed and another had more chance to live in jail.
In fact, I could not put every details in, so, the audience will understand it from guessing in the little show.
I don't know how to write something well which is cheap as well. It is the problem, maybe??




Thanks!
 
Very expensive to shoot - as sfoster said. That's a lot of locations for
3 pages.

How about trying a story with one location and no more than four
people? My first short film was two girls daring a boy to walk up
to a spooky house, right the doorbell and run. Four pages, one
location. My second short film was one man inside a closet and
there is something outside.
 
Very expensive to shoot - as sfoster said. That's a lot of locations for
3 pages.

How about trying a story with one location and no more than four
people? My first short film was two girls daring a boy to walk up
to a spooky house, right the doorbell and run. Four pages, one
location. My second short film was one man inside a closet and
there is something outside.

OK, what about this one? I didn't make it in script format yet, but this needs a dog, and an old couple.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0BxbVfiVFJyhAbTlCTWhoZWN6WlE


Thanks!
 
OK, what about this one? I didn't make it in script format yet,
This is a nice short story.

You've been posting here for 14 months. You have asked for format
help and gotten it several times. You have even done what no writer
here has done; had Steven Spielberg read your work and give you a
positive comment. I understand that your English skill will take more
than 14 months to perfect, but you still haven't shown us any script
in proper format. Learning format basics should take a few hours yet
here we are, 14 months after you first asked for and got help, showing
us filmmakers a script and a short story not in screenplay format.


Your next challenge;

Since you are asking filmmakers to make your script into a movie it's
time for you to step up to screenplay format. That format is how the
writer communicates with the filmmaker. You've looked at the link I
gave you so you now understand things like Scene Heading and Action.
Take both of these stories you have posted and put them in proper
screenplay format. Once again, don't worry about your lack of English
language skill, just show us that you are learning proper format.

Are you up to the challenge?
 
This is a nice short story.

You've been posting here for 14 months. You have asked for format
help and gotten it several times. You have even done what no writer
here has done; had Steven Spielberg read your work and give you a
positive comment. I understand that your English skill will take more
than 14 months to perfect, but you still haven't shown us any script
in proper format. Learning format basics should take a few hours yet
here we are, 14 months after you first asked for and got help, showing
us filmmakers a script and a short story not in screenplay format.


Your next challenge;

Since you are asking filmmakers to make your script into a movie it's
time for you to step up to screenplay format. That format is how the
writer communicates with the filmmaker. You've looked at the link I
gave you so you now understand things like Scene Heading and Action.
Take both of these stories you have posted and put them in proper
screenplay format. Once again, don't worry about your lack of English
language skill, just show us that you are learning proper format.

Are you up to the challenge?

Thank you! I've never personally seen Steven Spielberg, I only knew a friend who knew him by sight. I didn't talk directly to him, so I think it could be a compliment. Although, I have another friend who is director (did one feature, but not short) and said the positive comment, too.
I recognized the friend of Mr Spielberg in 19 years old (9 years ago), and saw his photo with Mr Spielberg's mom. He is famous in Hollywood, although, I never knew him, nor even I've heard about Mr Spielberg before. I only heard name of Oliver Stone from state TV in Iran, and maybe one more...
I was not into movie like that. But then, learned his name. But the reality is long time I didn't talk to him, and it is probably so that they didn't see me good enough to write a film for them. Of course, it is a high expectation to want from a very famous director do a film with an unknown person.


About challenge, I know the script format lack is a problem here, so, I try to make what I want to give you in it, yes, I even get help from software from it, so, you can expect I do my select texts in script format and I will do it... Sure....



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Nor even I've heard about Mr Spielberg before. I only heard name of Oliver Stone from state TV in Iran

That's interesting! Oliver Stone is very political so maybe that's why.
I imagine that iran is not very sympathetic to Schindler's List.

I'm always curious about what aspects of film and culture make it to other countries.
 
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wake up scene

an empty room.

then you have someone talking. who is talking if the room was empty.
why is it called wake up scene. call it INT. BEDROOM maybe? or living room. what kind of room is it?

is someone supposed to be sleeping on the bare floor and then wake up?
then you need to say that.

all you've got is an empty room on the screen.
 
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