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Old 12-24-2017, 02:35 PM   #1
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Caution "Ashikara's Detective Service" my most ambitious film yet



LOOKING FOR CONSTRUCTIVE FEEDBACK. THIS IS MY 4TH OFFICIAL FILM AS A HIGH SCHOOL SENIOR. TRYING TO MAKE IT IN THIS FILM WORLD. JUST GONNA KEEP MAKING MOVIES.
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Old 12-31-2017, 03:52 PM   #3
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Great work. I will say, you are growing as a filmmaker at an impressive rate since first posting on this site. This is what, your fourth bigger project in the past 6 months? That's commendable on its own.

Some feedback I have: the relationship between Ashikara and Johnny wasn't entirely clear for a while. The b&w flashback did help, however.
Some more coverage would have been nice. I like the wides of the alley in the beginning, but beyond that, its hard to get emotionally involved into some of the characters.

Excited to see your next project!
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Old 01-10-2018, 07:51 PM   #5
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Great work. I will say, you are growing as a filmmaker at an impressive rate since first posting on this site. This is what, your fourth bigger project in the past 6 months? That's commendable on its own.

Some feedback I have: the relationship between Ashikara and Johnny wasn't entirely clear for a while. The b&w flashback did help, however.
Some more coverage would have been nice. I like the wides of the alley in the beginning, but beyond that, its hard to get emotionally involved into some of the characters.

Excited to see your next project!
Thank you, appreciate the feedback. I completely agree with the majority of what you said
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