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Old 07-22-2017, 05:42 PM   #1
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My first ever professional film work - thoughts?

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Very, very slow start. Just about lost me, but I stuck with it.

Lesson #1: deinterlace your footage before you post it on the Internet. The interlace artifacts were distracting. I assume you shot interlaced for broadcast? (Are commercials in the UK really 2:45?!) If you're shooting for Internet distribution, always shoot progressive.

Cutaway angles are all over the place and on both sides of the 180 line. Vertical edges often aren't level. And it looks like a bunch of your shots are at standing eye level, which is dull and flat. Try dropping your tripod down so the lens is level with your shoulder, or even your sternum. How you want to present (highlight, maximize, minimize) the subject and how you want the background and horizon to play should dictate camera height.

Colors are relatively dull... kinda like exposure was off or it just came straight out of the camera with no correction or grade. It just doesn't pop, and for tech stuff it needs to have some zing.

The oval GFX overlay slowly moving across the screen looks very amateurish.

The whole thing moved pretty slowly, and could have been done in half the time.

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Old 07-23-2017, 12:11 AM   #3
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Valid points AcousticAl, although this didn't seem that bad for a small company's website or a trade show video. But then I'm not a pro.
What are you using to watch it? I'm not sure if I see any interlace artifacts with my laptop.
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Old 07-23-2017, 01:29 AM   #4
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The passing of this movie is very slow. Looks like al of the info should fit into a 1:30 minute's.
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