Sound has been (mainly) cleaned up in ADR, though you'll hear when it was not possible in the latter third.
It has about 3 minutes difference from the original cut, with a much more ambiguous opening.
It also has a fantastic new score, courtesy of Florian Linckus, a very talented composer and musician.
Roughly 15mb streamable below, or straight download here
Replies below this line ('til today, anyway) are reflective of an earlier and very different cut.
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Here's my official entry for Round #3
As usual, my sound bites. (Also had to chop far too much out to make it fit within 5 minutes)
Regardless, this is what we ended up with... baseball cap, line of dialogue in place... and a superb effort from everyone involved to beat the time-limit.
I hope you enjoy it... and I'll take the feedback I get from this to make the Director's Cut (out after this is over) just that much better.
Zen--just finished watching your short. My first thought is -- Spoiler:that bartender is going to have a mighty clean glass!!! But anyway, I loved the bartender in this...just cleaning his glass...the cutaways to him are great! I also really liked the lighting and certain camera angles. One particular shot I liked (though don't ask me why??) was the profile of the hero with the villan's face just behind him. The B&W effect with the light worked very well. The BW look, coupled with the subject matter, reminds me of the classic Twilight Zone. I thought the performace of the actress was the best of the bunch.
There is some definite noise in the audio, but that can be cleaned up with noise reduction pretty easily (from what I understand..never actually done it myself, mind you...). Overall, great job!
Amazing lighting... that was my favorite part of the whole thing.
Fav Shot: Spoiler:The framing on the "NOOOOO!"
The script was excellent, the shots looked great- I got a great laugh at the Spoiler:Infernal Contract
Great short! Loved a lot of the subtle effects!
I'll be watching these a few times and try and come up with some critiscm, but I love them all so much it's hard to be objective yet!!
The Audio could use a little work, but other than that it was pretty well done! It had a nice beginning, middle, and end, and even a twist thrown in. Good job!
Wow Zen you are becoming the Master filmmaker! This is shot so well. Great use of the B&W and lighting. Your actors did a fine job as well. I see you had some "sex appeal" in this one with your actress. Nice move and she's just not a pretty face...she's a good actress! I hope you've kept her number. I think the title fits this movie very well.
I'm thrilled so many of you have mentioned the great shots. That was the expert work of Flaviu, and his trusty XL1. Most of the shot-ideas were his, too. He has a very good eye, and also imagination on how things would look.
He was on rollerblades for most of the time, and getting quite a workout zipping all over the bar. Many times he would start off with a backwards spin to gain immediate momentum to propel himself backwards. (It was limited space to work in)
He only fell once, the whole night... and as he plummeted to the ground he had 4 pairs of hands immediately reaching out to catch... the camera.
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The lights were set up by Vito and Lenny of Other Side Cinema. I'm sure they'll be delighted when I forward some of the comments about their fine work to them. They were a great help.
Steve,
Hello its......... MMMMMIIIIGGGGUUUUEEEEELLLLLLLL, Wow Steve. That turned out really good, Man, I miss my long hair you made me cut of to play Miguel. ( lol ) I just want to say that its always fun working with you and Dave ( Brad Hawkins )