So, i'm filming "Quickie in the kitchen" but as I kept rereading and going over the opening sequence, it felt like the opening was boring and uneventful, so I decided to film first act very last, just so I could be in schedule, and keep working on the begining
Today I finally completed rewriting the opening and a scene in the end, and it feels "right".
If you guys and gals got a moment, mind glancing over the first two pages, see which version you prefer better?
ORIGINAL
REWRITTEN
Thank you everyone!
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