Recent content by TenDay

Great advice. I think I need to revisit some of my dialogue. Now, assuming my action is adequate (which I’m sure is up for debate), should I then leave the ellipses and dashes, or just let the actor decide it as follows: The door bangs open and Roy stumbles into the room. He falls against the...

Good suggestions, Indie-Arms. Thanks for the input! However, I didn’t go into the details because I didn’t want that to be the focus. Really, he was attacked and has broken ribs with a grazing, non-intrusive GSW. So, he’s got some dyspnea due to the broken ribs and winds up with a hemo/pneumo...

I'll double-check my action to be certain. Maybe it could use a little more reinforcement. I wasn't sure if I needed to have a note at the first scene stating something like, "Roy will be gasping for breath throughout the next XX scenes of dialogue," or if the action should be enough to carry...

Okay, so I've got a character who took a bullet to the chest and, subsequently, is having a little trouble breathing. Does anybody have any suggestions on how to make it clear that he's gasping for breath during his dialogue? I don't want to put "(gasping for breath)" in front of every line...