Shot By Shot
Pick up a book called Shot by Shot...it will be the most help to a new director. help you put the camera in the right places and deals with the mechanics of a director.
Decide where the camera should be.
I feel like your camera isnt always in the right place. Dont be afraid to get close to the 180 degree line...and def decide the best line of action before you decide where to put the camera.
Besides that its good, def has its own style. The story could use...