watch Don't Throw Stones, Comedy Short

Hey guys, here's a comedic short I did a while back with a pretty dark ending.
Let me know what you think!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jUH2TNhNLqg

I liked the intro.

The actor in the front smiled and looked at the camera quite a bit.

It seemed unable to focus on anything, and the shots with bad exposure were quite distracting as well.

The reveal of all the dead teenagers should have been the biggest laugh, but the timing was off... way off, mostly caused by the unnecessary party scene, as well as the guys checking out the woman, it was all unfocused.

This showed some true potential, but was not executed well.

I agree that the dead people fell short, and that the footage needed correction. I had a slight computer failure that held me back there, but I had a deadline. I'm sure some of you can relate. Same with actors looking at the camera...That one bothered me, and something I didn't notice until the editing phase.

I'm not sure what you mean by unfocused though, do you mean the lens or just the general idea?