watch Simple Narrative

Hey guys I have created a music video for my song Call Out, complete with cg evvironment and special effects. However I am not happy with the editing at the moment and think it needs looking at.

BUT, that isn't the point of this post- I am wondering about the narrative- whether it is too simple, if its understandable, or just even any good. With a music video the narrative surely needs to be kept simple, but I really wanted to tell a story, unlike so many music vids you see where its just shot after shot glorifying the artist. Please take a looks and see what you think
This is the video: http://vimeo.com/40936794
And this is a short survey if you feel like it: http://www.surveymonkey.com/s/P5DYW9B

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I watched the entire thing. There seems to be a sound quality issue. I'm getting lots of "buzz" with the vocals on occasion. It could be my mac, but it doesn't do that on any other audio.

There were some jumpy edits at around 2:40. REALLY jumpy. The outline of the actors when seen against the green screen seems really heavily pixelated/blocky as well.

The girl is pretty and the music is not bad. The video just looks really unpolished. Unfortunately, I am too unskilled to tell you how to fix it.