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watch "Two of the Same" Short Film

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I've been looking through here and some of the amazing talent I have seen is quite daunting, but here goes ;) This is my first proper short film. It was good fun to make, I and the cast had great fun getting to grips with everything. Anyway, here it is, any feedback will be appreciated. Thanks all!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W7cCUftIp1w

It's a 'psychological' film about coping with bad news.

I know there a problems with the audio quality (Particularly the voice over) This is because that was very rushed as it was part of a college course, I needed to get it all done by a deadline, and that came last. Bad planning I guess. I know some of the shots are amatuerish too, but I'm starting to catch on.
 
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well done dude.

really good story.

like you said there was some audio issues, and maybe some performance issues.

but i really did enjoy the story and concept.

It kinda reminded me of Moon.
 
Thanks man, yeah the reason the performance quality is low is because I compressed the file with no real knowledge on how to compress videos properly. But yeah, there are other issues I know, but thanks for the feedback :)
 
Thanks man! I just wanted to try something the would challenge me in every way, and it did. It may not have turned out fantastic, but it was a good experience none the less! Yeah, Aronofsky and Nolan did influence me a lot at the time of making XD Thanks for the feedback :)
 
did u film this in exeter? I was there once...good shots and transitions but i cud defly tell ur audio was recorded in a set somewhere...maybe next time when doin audio over, do it outside? i duno thats prolly just the cheapest way ;)
 
Filmmaking is a visual medium. Show us, don't tell us. The vast majority of this story is told via narration. Might as well make a radio show.

For what it's worth, my advice is that your next short be much more action-oriented. I don't mean action, as in punching and fighting, but in the sense that stuff is happening on-screen, in continuous action. All those fade-ins are masking the fact that you really haven't yet edited much of a complete scene together.

Here's a challenge for you -- it will be more difficult than you probably imagine, and you'll learn a great deal about basic blocking, shot-selection and editing. I think your next short should take place in one location. You can't use any fade-ins or fade-outs. Narration is forbidden, and dialogue should be kept to a minimum.
 
You're right, the voice over was alot more... prominent than I had hoped, but I couldn't get it to work properly without it so in the end I sort of shoved it in (as you can tell)

So you mean like edit a full, linear scene? I'll give it my best shot, thanks for your feedback :)

And Googlyelmo, the voice over was very last minute and a bit much, I'll work on it in future XD

Cheers guys :)
 
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