Opening scene could have used a filter, Lots of blues. Maybe you meant to do this to get a downer effect but at the beginning I wouldn't do this. It will make the audience in a depressed mood from the start and you want to capture them first, not depress them. To me it looks like an error on the cinematographer.
I like how you posed me to ask a question at the beginning of the film; "How did it control his life?" A good hook for a short.
@ 1:39 there was a jump cut (also at the end of the tournament there was one). She is on the right, him left. Then she is on the left, him right. @ 1:45 you went back to their original locations. Please read other reviews of mine to figure out how NOT to do this. If you already know, then why did you let this happen?
I like the chess board on the patio ground. Good scene set up and use of depth of field. The only dull point was the back wall was extremely dull and boring. Other scenes were not as impressive throughout but they didn't hurt the film either. But note, they didn’t enhance the story either.
Lighting seemed fair at best throughout, could have done a much better job. I suspect you used natural light?
This is the first time I'm saying this but the acting was weak. Almost to the point where I felt they have never done any kind of acting work before. Also at one point the dialogue was so bad, something the girlfriend/wife said, it made me cringe. Also, after yelling at him in one scene it looked like the guy was smiling as she walked away.
** Sound ** I'm coming to understand that most of these projects on this site are two tracks or less. I can't say this enough, sound is 50 percent of the film. If you give me music and dialogue I can't get into the scene. It just don't allow me to believe what's going on up on the screen. Sound is a key component that gives atmosphere to a film, not fucking 3D (sorry, had to do it because of past debates and comments in other threads and the 3D has nothing to do with you folks ; ) ). I want to feel like I'm in the room at the chess tournament. I want to hear the chess piece hit the board. I want to be uncomfortable because I'm in the room where they are fighting. Sound will help capture your audience's attention and damn it, at least try and do a foley session. Try and put in some ambient sound with the music track. I don't know, maybe your editing programs only allows you two tracks but I've never seen this on any program. Remember, if you take away the image and listen to just the sound I should still know what is going on.
Story was fine and moved okay. It’s bit simple and predicable once it got going but it's just a short and your third film. I'm glad you resolved my question at the end. If you hadn't I would have ripped you a new a$$.
Beyond that and knowing this is your third short (you said it), it's time to challenge yourselves and take risks. The cameraman needs to find more interesting shots (move the camera but remember, it has to have purpose). The editor could maybe try to tell the story so it isn't so simply done. If it doesn't work then he can change it back to the simple way. WORK WITH SOUND and NO SOUND TRACKS ON THE NEXT ONE! ZERO! Challenge yourselves for crying out loud. The sets looked dull, I would try and add more color to the scenes. If you want to show that they are happy, then explode me with color. Then get duller as the relationship starts to deteriorate and his life starts falling apart. Better lighting would have helped this. But at least you tried to use depth of field which I applauded you. I think one other I reviewed tried to use depth. It's NOT a bad film but not enough for me to tell a friend to see it.
EDIT: Also, you had one great transition from one scene to another which i meant to mention. Where he is sitting there and you transitioned the same look to another location. Good job.
Good luck.